Stepping off the bus at the same time
Together, but so far apart
Is this right? I should just turn around now.
Do I want to do this? Shes definitely not sober…
Stumbling to the door, where are my keys?
The door opens, both walk in.
What’s his name again?
Bedroom door closes,
Leaving innocence and morals behind.
This isn’t right.
What will tomorrow be like?
Lights go out, sheets tear across the bed.
The package rips open and is applied... kinda
What’s her name again?
Tied together for life.
Good job giving the absolute bare minimum here. Just enough imagery and insight into the thoughts running through the character's minds here.
ReplyDeleteBecky...
ReplyDeleteRacey. I like this a lot! Definitely tells a full story in a short space. Good imagery. I would just stick to one person's point of view though. It threw me off when it said "What's his name again?" because I thought it was just from his point of view.